I plan on revising essay number three. I believe I could add much more to the story including what happened before I left the country and what happened after I came back. Also I got more information from the trip from my family that I was to young to remember. Also I think my third essay is just a whole lot more entertaining than my last essay. I think a essay about travel is just more intriguing to people, especially since most Americans are like me and do not travel very often outside of the country.
I want to add a story about me going to the hospital and having to get my shots in order to be able to travel outside the country. It was an interesting story cause I remember I never cried as hard as that day and I made such a scene that my mom still talks about it today.
I also went to add a story about what happened when I came back from the vacation and immediately had to begin school for the first time.
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